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Title: I love you
Post by: Maleeq on January 03, 2003, 02:34:40 AM
It's like a team desperate for a win
Or the boy crying for his toy
Perhaps the girl eager to have a curl
It's like Mr. Bob looking for a job
Or the lady expecting her first baby
Well, it's the cat searching for a rat
May be a bull hungry for some food
It's some thugs looking for some drugs
Parhaps the patient in need of attention
All these are nothing but worthless words
Endreared in the face of the world  
'cos my love for you
Is so pure and true
That words from my mind
Could easily fill a vine
I love you so very much.
Title: Re: I love you
Post by: Bilyaminu on January 03, 2003, 05:08:06 PM
that was cool nididaz but how many day did it take u to compose that, anyway
nice one there
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Post by: Maleeq on January 11, 2003, 09:07:14 PM
    well bilya this is beyond your imagination
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Post by: Aydee Fella on January 12, 2003, 02:56:55 AM
komot my friend ,no be fluke u fluke am.
Title: Re: I love you
Post by: Maleeq on January 12, 2003, 09:28:30 PM
hey dagoodfella u know what i've doin a lot of thinkin waz it 6 months or 5 months ago u last posted a poem?///////????? :-/ :-/ :-/ ;D ;D
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Post by: Aydee Fella on January 13, 2003, 05:07:00 AM
tell mi boi is it mandatory dat we paste poems all over the place :-/
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Post by: Maleeq on January 15, 2003, 04:58:06 AM
   of course its not mandatory but eemmmmmmmm next time u just shut up while others(me) do their thang ;D ;D ;D
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Post by: Ibro2g on January 15, 2003, 09:33:21 PM
hahaha. And aydee u should appreciate it. dazzo keep it up ;D ;D :D :D :D ;D :D ;)
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Post by: Maleeq on January 17, 2003, 05:18:07 AM
  ibro2g    akwai ka da fadan gaskiya
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Post by: Ibro2g on January 20, 2003, 03:37:34 AM
kadan ma kagani ;D
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Post by: Waziri on January 20, 2003, 11:25:45 AM
Maleeq,

Ur poem is good, try making it to appear more apt, I mean sharpen the curves of your expressions. In poetry words are suppossed to be meticulously chisseled and carefully arranged.

All the same, the poem is good.

Waz.
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Post by: Ibro2g on January 20, 2003, 03:35:46 PM
:D ;DAbdul maleeq, lern from the pros... ;)
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Post by: Maleeq on January 21, 2003, 05:44:40 AM
yoh waz thanx for tha tip.
  really appreciate it.
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Post by: Ibro2g on February 25, 2003, 05:06:36 AM
keep da pride man.