The competition

Maleeq · January 25, 2003, 01:25:24 AM

The Competition
Before you i lay a debate
Trully for the good of the state
I want everyone to open their eyes
For in what i say there are no lies
I present to you the Competition
Which is definately not fiction
Men wth their insatiable lust for money
So unaware that their heads they bury
Men have end up in senseless brawls
All in the name of riches of the world    
I see mankind as a mere jungle
Though with a well distinctive struggle
The struggle of survival
To do away with your rival
But if the approach is well manouvered
It could be the lost key desired
The key that will bring together all races
A key that will put a smile on all faces

Blaqueen · January 27, 2003, 04:03:57 AM

amma.. wallah.. people got skilzz...... iz not fair naaaaaaaa  >:(

nyce pohwem! ;)

Waziri · January 29, 2003, 03:13:37 PM

Abdul,

Tis really a good one. Maybe u should be more economical with words in poems and be not forcing the rhymes. Let everything flow naturally. It is not necessary that a poem most have rhymes before it becomes good. You can do with rhythm only.

Tis really a good one Abdul. Keep it up.

Waziri

ummita · January 29, 2003, 07:05:21 PM

This is sorted!!!! This is soooooooo sorted. 2 thumbs up @ yah Maleeq

Maleeq · January 30, 2003, 05:33:55 AM

thanx for tha friendly tip Wazirri.
i'll definately work on it ;)

                                    i'm out ;) :D

nura · January 30, 2003, 09:33:17 PM

Great one Abdulmaleeq. Keep it up.

Maleeq · January 31, 2003, 05:07:16 AM

thanx abumujahid ;)

                 i'm out :D ;)

Ibro2g · February 25, 2003, 05:04:03 AM

Kai niggadazz kana wutaaaa! :o 8)

Maleeq · March 03, 2003, 05:56:31 AM

QuoteKai niggadazz kana wutaaaa! :o 8)

     u think

Ibro2g · March 15, 2003, 01:14:49 AM

karshe ma!!! 8)